Script - First Draft Review

First Draft Script Review

Name three things that are working in the 1st draft of your script? 

The structure 
The first thing that is currently working well on my first draft of my script is the structure and the way it is laid out.
I feel like it is very organised and simple to read, It clearly shows the different scenes and the the different character when they start to talk. But some of the numbering of scenes I not correct and could do with a bit of re-structure with the scene order.

Stage directions
Another thing that is working well is the stage directions thatI have included stage directions and how detailed they are, for example;

"John is unpacking boxes in his kitchen, which have just been packed by Jane, his daughter. It a cold and gloomy day and Radio 4 is on in the background."

The stage directions show was the character is doing, where he is located , what the physical settings is and what the aural setting is (the music).

The characters 
The last thing that I think is working well is ....

Name three things that require development?

The dialogue 
One thing that requires development is... 

The order of scene (structure)
This also requires development because... 

Discuss specific points to evidence where and why changes will be made? 

I will continue to develop and finish this scene;

Old Man (John Watson aged 72) Moving in with daughter Julie.

Scene 1 - John
John is unpacking boxes in his kitchen, which have just been packed by Jane, his daughter. It a cold and gloomy day and Radio 4 is on in the background.

This scene is obviously isn't finished, but .... 

What would you like to achieve in your final piece?

A more dialogue to create more scenes, I would like the continue going along the storyline and hopefully create some tension and a climax into the play.

How much consideration have you given to staging? 

I would like to set the stage as a street.
Using specific lighting to show 3 different houses, the house would be next to each other.
The set would have part of the interior of the houses on stage, maybe showing v rooms where the characters use the most.
Doing this I would need a be able to use a fairly big stage and probably a big budget.